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 SELENA Open in new Window. [E]
LADY TEJANA
by Captbike Author Icon
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello Captbike Author Icon

I am a little stymied by your title above the text.

XPbICTA\SELENAQUINTANILLA/GIgANTA *Right* What is the bold part meant to say or do? If this is supposed to change the font size or appearance, it won't work on this site. We use WritingML Help. You can also find easy shortcuts to WritingML above each text box.

This essay about Selena is very respectful and seems to be well researched. I wonder, was this written for a school assignment? I recognize the persuasive essay style to recap the content of the piece in the final paragraph. One content suggestion would be to mention your personal favorite of Selena's songs to make the piece more personal to you.

I like that you didn't name the president of Selena's fan club. She doesn't deserve to see her name in the same texts as Selena.

I have one nitpick about the text.

collaborations with modern artists *Right* in order to collaborate, an artist has to be present. Since the collaboration is mentioned after the Netflix special, it sounds like Kacey Musgraves and Karol G gave tributes to Selena but never got to work with her. I haven't investigated any of this, but it would make sense for you to clarify that part of the text.

You chose an easy to read font size and the paragraph breaks are perfect for an online text.

Annette
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