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The Iron Bank of Braavos  (13+) For G.o.T. Activity #1994693 by Gaby

A Review From The Iron Bank Of Braavos
Hi Lexi Silver
My name is Megan. I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: The Bentleys Chapter 1

First Impression: Mice. I thought oh no. I read they live like humans but are rich and I thought this could be cute and entertaining. I was interested. I thought I will give this a shot. Maybe I will see mice in a better light. I started to read this and I like this nice mice family. Good descriptions and I was drawn in. I felt like a guest in this mouse house. The first sentence. The Bentleys were not your average mice. That was my invitation.

What needs your attention: I wondered why the mouse salesman was stuttering. A mouse lawyer. Did humans have cases against mice or vice versa? Did humans know about the rich mice? Were they field mice? Were they white, black or what colors? I am curious. Did a cat live near by? Were the mice safe from owls?

Overall Impression: This mice family lives better then I do. A rich mouse family. Easy to follow with a good style. Good dialogue. They do talk like humans. I live in a house in the country and see field mice but if mice could live like this. I could accept them. Looks like you spent time with this. Creative and I see there is a chapter two and I would enjoy the next chapter. The lawyer mouse and salesman mouse were arguing. This makes me curious. Well defined writing and definitely worth a read. I enjoyed reading this and I thank you for sharing.

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