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 Too Bored to Function Open in new Window. [E]
Random, half-thought-out poem because why not?
by Auri Johnson Author Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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A brief and simple poem, loosely written and drifting casually from thought to thought, as the narrator spills their feelings of ennui and exhaustion onto the page. We can feel the frustration as they speak of not wanting to live in a lie, trying unsuccessfully to drum up motivation and achieve goals that must feel unattainable at times. All the things that one would hope would make them happy and satisfied, even the most basic biological function of good sleep, isn’t enough to help them feel any better. A profound lack of meaning and significance is felt, as they realize that they are not happy even if it seems they should be or even are.

As a free verse poem, I don’t have much to criticize about it. I’m a casual poet myself, but I can’t be bothered counting syllables or measuring meter, so I’m not qualified to advise anyone on specific poetic structures or forms. I see poetry as a very laidback and subjective art form, which allows one to express themselves in any way they like and build something meaningful with a few choice words.

I would suggest adding a line count in case you want to submit your poetry to contests around here. You can also use size 4 Verdana font to ensure readability across devices.

I enjoyed reading this, and hope to see more from you. Take care and keep writing.

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