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 This Never Ending Night  Open in new Window. [ASR]
Spectre pulls an all-nighter with a rebound
by Spectre Lives Author Icon
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
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Hello Spectre Lives! This review is given on behalf of "Game of ThronesOpen in new Window.. Happy Anniversary! I look forward to seeing you in the halls of WDC!

*Reading* I liked how you spun this story. It's a unique and creative way to write about a spectre picking up a soul.

The frustration of the spectre was clearly noticeable. You wrote how the soul kept blinking in and out of death, because of his defibrillator really well.

Your opening was strong and grabbed my attention, the story held my attention throughout, and you wrapped up the story nicely.

I do have a few suggestions below. Please use or discard them as you see fit.

*Bookstack2* time zone and

time zone, and

"Yes I'm here

"Yes, I'm here

*Notepady* when your dead.

when you're dead.

*Bookstack3* "Yeah we've met

"Yeah, we've met

*Pencil* your body laying

your body lying

*Books1* fractures and physically bleeding out and internally,

fractures, bleeding out, and internal bleeding,

*Notepad* Spectre couldn't help himself but to think. I really miss

Spectre couldn't help but think how much he missed

*Bookstack* now days

nowadays

*Penbl* "Yes I'm here

"Yes, I'm here

*Tackb* its supposed

it's supposed

Thank you so much for sharing your story with us. I enjoyed it.

*Heart* Intuey

"When you play the Game of Thrones you win, or you die." Cersei Lannister
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