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My name is Megan, one of the sly foxes.

Title: The Basket Day

First Impression: Getting an Easter Basket is so nice for kids to wake up to. They wonder what they will get. This kid didn't get what he had hoped for and is afraid his parents will blame him. I was drawn to this because of it being Easter. I had to read more. So, I went forward and started reading.

What needs your attention: The mice stayed in the attic for another year. Looks like the mice stayed another year. Did they steal Christmas gifts as well? What did the parents think happen to the goodies in the easter Basket? This is one paragraph. It should have been written into two paragraphs. It would have been easier to see.

What part I liked best: The mice living in the attic. The boy thinking the Easter Bunny is like Santa Claus. He knows everything. The concept of getting an Easter basket is always nice.

Overall Impression: This holds the reader's interest. When animals are added to a story, it makes for a good story. Mice have taken Easter goodies more then once, I am sure. Randy is a well rounded character. You understand his fears and disappointment. A well written story.

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