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Hi B.D. Mitchell

My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: Hare Trigger

First Impression: My interest was immediately peeked with the opening line. Kudos! That's what an editor wants from any author.

What needs your attention: I didn't note anything punctuation or grammar wise that needed attention.

What part I liked best: I loved the description half-prowling, half-loping gait. I could see that image in my mind of large hare. I raised Checkered Giants while my children were at home. We didn't eat them but did use their poop for fertilizer in my gardens. I had one huge vegetable and seven flower gardens that thrived because of the rabbits.
In West Forks, Maine there is a general store named Berry's. The owner has a jack-a-lope, he had a taxidermist mount his antlers from a spike horn deer he had killed to a rabbit he had also killed during hunting season. The odd looking creature sits on a shelf behind the counter where tourists can see it. He tells these whopping tales about these mysterious jack-a-lopes that appear every spring after the snow melts. If you see one, it's supposed to bring you good fortune. Gordon, the owner is quite the storyteller and lots of tourists take his picture beside the jack-a-lope.

Overall impression: I enjoyed the story's ending with the amusing twist of Happy Trails. Your story brought back some awesome memories for me. Thank you.

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What does the Fox say?????


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