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My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: Strawberry Jam

First Impression: Strawberry Jam reminded me of when I helped my grandfather pick strawberries in their huge garden. My grandfather used to complain about the varmints all the time. I chuckled when your varmints ending up being Maddie and Emma.

What needs your attention: I'm not sure what the author intended by 40-acre truck farm. I took Mr. Crumps property to be agricultural not mechanical.

What part I liked best: I thought the author did an excellent job with Maddie and Emma's individual personalities. Maddie wanting to be trusted by her parents to be a good baby-sitter and Emma with equal determination to get the strawberries she wanted in Mr. Crump's garden.
Mr. Crump scaring the daylights out of Maddie because he had snatched Emma when she went through the fence was heart wrenching at first then heartwarming when Maddie discovered her sister eating strawberries with cream and sugar. I've enjoyed many a bowl of strawberries like that in my life.

Overall impression: A delightful story to read with good pacing and believable characters. I was pleased Mr. Crumps was an old softie in the end.

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