Hi Scott Wilfred Hemsway -

This is a "Game of Thrones"  review.

The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinions and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

The reason I chose this particular story/poem: The title caught my attention and the description was intriguing.

My opinion of said story/poem: I can't say I understand this story, but I think it is intentionally so. It appears to be one of those tales that is meant to be abstruse (hopefully I'm using this word correctly) in its conveyance, but the meaning is much simpler. Such as, this story could just be about killing, cooking, and eating a chicken. (I'm probably really off base because I'm in way over my head here). Since this type of writing is not my forte I'm just going to comment on things I noticed that might or might not need attention.

1. I found it quite interesting that you wrote yourself into the story. I think that is supposed to say something about you or the story or both. Not sure why you have to keep reburying your brother though.

2. In the second paragraph, the last sentence has the priest placing something on his head and then washing it down with a swig of wine. I'm thinking this needs a little clarification since he probably isn't pouring wine on his head. Again, that may be exactly what he is meant to do, I'm only guessing.

Conclusion: You are probably wondering why I would do a review of a story I don't quite understand. It's because of your writing style. Not everyone can pull off using excessive descriptive words without losing the reader's attention. I really enjoyed the imagery. Every paragraph had a new and colorful scene to keep my attention. Even though I didn't fully comprehend your story, it was still a joy to read.

Write on!

Thanks much,
Lovina




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