Hi Saurian200 -

This is a "Game of Thrones"  review.

The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. this is only the opinions and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

The reason I chose this particular story/poem: The description sounded interesting.

My opinion of said story/poem: An intriguing concept. Entities, known as Judges, punish people by rewriting their lives and even undoing the damage they had done. I can think of more than a few politicians I would like to see Judged these days.

If you could put spaces between each paragraph and increase the font size it would be much easier to read on the computer screen and greatly appreciated by those of us who have spent way too much time reading computer screens.

In the third paragraph, the last sentence appears to be missing a word. It reads "person was here to see" and should be "person he was here to see".

You didn't overly describe your main character which can be good, it gives the reader a chance to visualize. I see him as a bit frumpy, everyday-looking, with glasses. Allowing the reader room to create in their mind's eye is a sign of good writing. There is that fine line between too much detail and not enough detail.

Conclusion: I enjoyed your story and its imaginative plot. It's an easy read: no spelling errors, which usually means good editing practices, and some great descriptions.

Write on!

Thanks much,
Lovina




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