Hello!
FaeThorned

I came across your story, Throwing Rocks while surfing Read a Newbie. I enjoyed reading it very much. This is an "Game of Thrones"  review, and I hope you find this a helpful feedback.

Overall Impression:

This story is very entertaining. It was easy to see a young, mischievous boy playing in a massive junkyard, letting his imagination dictate his play, until his fantasy turns to reality. The story was written in 3rd person and you did an excellent job of bringing in dialogue.

The main character, Little Jimmy was written very well. He was excellently developed and believable. The characters of his parents were also believable. You portrayed them as not dirt poor but rather they were able to make a decent living. They are a country folk. The audience is made to feel at home watching this family.


Plot:

The plot follows a young boy left to care for and entertain himself until his parents return. This isn't the first time. He plays his usual games until a meteor crashes with a small alien aboard in his yard.

This plot is well developed and carried out and immediately captured my interest.


Style/Tone:

Actually your style and tone was my favorite. I thought your word choice was very good. It portrayed the characters well and made them even more believable. Your choice of everyday "down home" language was great. I found your word choice easy to relate too. Your sentence structure was very good.


Scene/Setting:

All were very good and worked well together.


Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:

I saw no issues in this area.

Characters:

Very well-created and developed.


Dialogue:

Dialogue was smooth and well-balanced.


Suggestions:

I have none to offer.

What I liked the best was the description of the alien and the very last sentence.


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