Hi Legerdemain, I'm still looking through your assortment of poetry. This one caught my eye because it looked like it would be fun to read. The title of, Zippy, and the introduction of, 'Poor Zippy', intrigued my curiosity, as I wondered who this Zippy was and what was the delimma about. Also, I really love pictures of animals, and stories/poems about animals, so when I saw the genres which you picked, I knew it would be something which I would enjoy spending some time with.

Wow, I enjoyed the fun rhyme pattern, and the upbeat themne throughout.
One could not help but smile while reading this cute poem. You are very talented, indeed. I just read a poem from you which I felt was very artsy, and now you did this adorable, 'fun', poem. You can really do it all!

The first stanza begins with Zippy about to be born. I thought this was a creative idea and way to start a poem. Zippy has a conversation with Gob about what color he would like to be. What a truly fun idea!
So, Poor Zippy - Yes, now I really get the title! Poor Zippy seems confused. Your readers will understand that from the words you picked in your character's conversation.

I was able to figure out very easily, through the next couple of stanzas that Zippy's indecision continued. I loved how you allowed your readers to get an idea of how cute little Zippy was, as he teeter-tottered back and forth between Black and White, and just could seem to make up his mind.

When you wrote how God chuckled, I had the impression that what Zippy would end up with, was, in a way, God's surprise joke to play on him.
We all know what a Zebra looks like!

I thought this would be a fun poem to read, and I wasn't disappointed. Have you ever thought about adding a zebra image along with this poem? I'm sure you are the person to have a bunch of those.


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