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Hi IE

My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: Sneeze

First Impression: I vividly remember this time frame in history. I didn't have the opportunity to hear MLK speak in person but I did hear Malcolm X in New Haven. Intense speakers these men wer. We haven't had any leaders like them since.

The story is interesting how you wove in the facts about the letter to MLK and used the real girl's name.

What needs your attention: This is what jumped out at me that made me wonder about your characters. 47 roses for 47th birthday made me question the ages of the children involved because they didn't sound like high school age. Maybe 37 would be more believable.

Girls typically play softball not boys. Boys usually play baseball.

What part I liked best: The interaction at the table and the discussion about listening to the speeches. I remember that announcement, Walter Cronkit was the best newscaster ever in my opinion. Dumbfounded describes the majority of us. It was just unimaginable.

Overall impression: The author did a great job of weaving actual facts into a story for Writer's Cramp. The pacing was good.

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What does the Fox say????? May MLK never be forgotten


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