Hi NaNotatoGo! ,

I have the pleasure of reviewing your item as part of the "Game of Thrones"  challenge.

For me, this is quite a different piece, but I was attracted to this concept and title of your blog and was curious as to how you would go about this ambitious task.

From the start, I was struck by the appealing tone of your writing.

Your style here is conversational but not preachy, you take care and thought with your words and I can feel the empathy in your placement. By this, I mean that I see that you are thinking about how the words will be understood, and the message 'felt' by someone who does not know the things you are explaining. It would be very easy to come off as condescending in that instance, but you do not.

You had a good pace for your writing, and the rate of revelations is comfortable. Not too quick to bamboozle, nor too slow to bore.

Story Arc:
The entry kicks off with speaking about Easter, which prompts you to go into an arc of detail. As I read this I felt aware that this was a tangent you were taking us on, and I was waiting for the point in which we reconnect with the original concept. Easter.

When the article did come back to Easter, I felt like I needed a little bit more of a fuss made of that fact - perhaps some details about how the Resurrection is celebrated in your faith.

Technically:
You've got great spelling, well proofed. The only question mark I have is the use of parenthesis on a complete sentence here:
...and its ordinances. (Which will be discussed in another entry.)

I am not a grammar expert, but I think it would read more smoothly as:
and its ordinances, (which will be discussed in another entry.)

Overall:
I had numerous surprises when reading this entry, with details about your faith that I had no idea about previously. From the viewpoint of a curious mind wanting to understand others' belief systems, this is a valuable insight.

It would be interesting to he a question and answer session afterward - but then I suppose that is the beauty of a blog book, there is the option of writing such into the comments function. Yes, a blog is definitely the correct format for this post.

Thank you for sharing your faith

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