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 The light at the end of a tunnel Open in new Window. [E]
Some ghosts have memories
by Lydia Davidson Author Icon
Review by Chrys O'Shea Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello Lydia,

I am Kristina, and I am here to give you an Anniversary "Game of ThronesOpen in new Window. review and rate it. I cam across your story, The Light at the End of a Tunnel, while surfing those members who are maintaining Black Cases.

I enjoyed reading it very much and I hope you find this review useful.

Overall Impression:
I enjoyed this story very much. It reminded me of my teenage years and our illegal drags at Rocky Point. *Blush* I liked how your story captured my attention from the beginning and held it till the end. Your descriptions of the setting and the first person POV were very effective.

Plot: This is a story about how four teenage boys are lured to a place and killed by previous victims of the same place.

Style/Tone: Your word choices. sentence structure, and figurative language choices were very good and effective.

Scene/Setting: The time, place, and setting characteristics were adequate and worked well together.

Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation: I saw no issues in this area.

Characters: Your presentation in 1st person was done very well.

Dialogue: There was no dialogue.

Suggestions: I cannot offer any suggestions for change or improvement. I thought the piece was well-written and executed.

Write On!
Kristina

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