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The Tale of Peter Piglet Open in new Window. [E]
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hell fellow writer! My name is Sandra. I am one of the sly foxes.
Title: The Tale of Peter Piglet
First Impression: I agree with the story teller/narrator. Why indeed can a pig not be named Peter? He could have been a Percival, or a Porter, or a Patrick or any other conceivable moniker. He requires some form of address and a method to identify him especially amongst other characters. I am chuckling/ guffawing as I read this anecdote of someone else attempting to read a tale to inquisitive and vocal children. Kids often interrupt to ask questions or proffer their observations. One comment leads to another. They feed off each other. They react. They argue. They wrestle and fidget. They proclaim their dislike or enjoyment. They always favour their own additions. The teacher in this tale also must act as a referee.
What needs your attention: Nothing. This reads well as it is. I detect no misspellings or dastardly typos in your text.
What part I liked best: I chuckled at the constant interruption from the children and the teacher's attempts to keep their attention on track with the story while juggling their concerns/suggestions. If Peter has a bunny friend then of course he could conceivably have an elephant friend. Today's generation have no idea that life existed and thrived long before the advent of smart phones, so, logically to them a pig could and should have checked the weather report on his device. I love the explanation that Peter was smart enough to write and read correspondence, but not to own and use a cellphone. What piglet ventures forth without an umbrella? You paint a chaotic, laughable scene.
Overall Impression: This piece is hilarious and does not stretch the bounds of tenuous teaching reality in the least.
Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure! What does the fox say??? Listen carefully. (1995 characters)Disclaimer: The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.
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