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Review #4742344
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Targaryen Musings Open in new Window. [ASR]
Fire and Blood
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         Review for entry/chapter: "Dragons on High" Open in new Window.
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Ah, a nifty story we have here. It’s not too steeped in GoT lore for an outsider to understand. A simple premise: two guys heading for the gold don’t expect a dragon to be guarding it! Your descriptions are clear and help us to envision the scenes well, without overstep the word count. I like the dialogue between the two, rather than just a dry narrative or a first person inner dialogue. This helps us stay engaged… although the story is over quickly anyway.

Are you planning on a series of stories? Can we do that, or is it going to be a disjointed hodgepodge as we continue down the GoT journey? Whatever happens, it looks like we’re all as well equipped as we could expect. I have nothing to suggest for corrections for this; seeing as that it’s flash fiction, you’ve done well in creating a brief snapshot of action and tension. The smell of brimstone is a grim warning, a foreshadowing of what we find at the end. Remember the magic triad of goals, stakes and obstacles to make your stories pop, no matter how brief.

Thanks for sharing and have fun!

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