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Cure for the Common Coffee Open in new Window. [13+]
He drank so much coffee that he had to write about it.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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GAMES OF THRONES FLASH FICTION REVIEW

This is a review for "Cure for the Common Coffee" Open in new Window. from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones" Open in new Window.

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*Reading* THE STORY

John writes coffee reviews for a living. It's not a bad job, but you'll soon discover it takes a lot of character to write coffee reviews.

*Smile*WHAT I LIKED

I *Heart* coffee!! Every drop. Just like John. hehe. I love how John has an old-fashioned, easy-going way about himself.


*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the 3rd person limited from John's perspective. Past tense is used in the story. Honestly, I love past tense stories.

*Star*DIALOGUE

There is no dialogue used.

*Star*OPENING PARAGRAPH

The opening paragraph put me right in the moment next to my own coffee maker, taking in the rich aroma of my own fufu coffee.


*Star*CHARACTERS

What I liked about John as a character, is he's fun, quirky, and easily relatable, even if he likes to use a typewriter. Heck, if it wasn't for typewriting class in High School, I wouldn't be here. Sometimes, it's best not to fiddle with what works.


*Star*FLOW & PACING

It's perfect. It wasn't too slow, and not too fast either. I was right in the moment with John.

*Star*MECHANICS

I did not notice and spelling/punctuation mistakes. My only suggestion here, and it's minor and a matter of style - maybe increase the font a little to make it easier on the eyes.

*Star*PARTING THOUGHTS

The title fits the story well. Good economy of words communicates well and evokes emotion. Nice, light-hearted comedic beats. I highly recommend a cup of "John" when you sit down to read!

Reviewed by StephB for House Targaryen

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