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A visit to Fishermen's Wharf followed by Cable Car pandemonium, frays a family's nerves.
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Title: Hey! Come Back With My Kid!

Hi Webwitch: I am Megan, one of the sly foxes.

First Impression: Visiting seals and city by the bay. An outing and looks lost a kid got lost so I decided to read more. The beauty of the place. There are so many beautiful places to see in America and everywhere it seems. I decided to give my observations.

What needs your attention: Is this in California? I wasn't sure. I have never been to California so wasn't sure. I think everything else checks out well in this story.

What part I liked best: Not you aren't allowed to harass the seals. I love seals and all animals. Traveling on a trolley car. A cable car. I could imagine the scenery in this.

Overall Impression: It is panic when your kid isn't with you in a crowded place and if she or he isn't with you on a cable car, you worry someone has taken them or you won't see them. You hope someone will be nice to your child. I panic when losing my kid in a toy store when he was little. Two teenage boys found him for me. I get this. Well written and this holds the reader's attention. Looks like you spent time with this. A good presentation.

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