Hello, Jaeff, aka Jeff!

This flash fiction story of yours was in the post before mine in "I Write in 2024," so I'm here to do your review. I hope you enjoy this review and find it encouraging and uplifting.


INITIAL IMPRESSION / OVERVIEW:
I greatly enjoyed reading your flash fiction story! Well done!

You kept me riveted and I read straight through to the end. Well done!



MORE DETAILED FEEDBACK:

I especially loved the surprise at the end! Well done!


If I remember correctly, your story won yesterday's prompt of the "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge" and I can see why. Kudos to you!

You did a fantastic job telling a whole story in under 300 words. The 298 words you used all lent to build up to the surprise at the end. You included sensory details and a great sense of setting along with two unique characters. Excellent all around story telling for flash fiction, in my opinion. Well done!


I didn't notice any spelling or grammatical mistakes (or mistakes of any kind) in your flash fiction story. Well done!


Your your flash fiction story was interesting to me, and I feel blessed that yours was the post before mine. I'd have made it an anniversary review otherwise, but now you (and I) don't have to wait almost a year for that.



IDEAS TO MAKE YOUR PIECE STRONGER:
I would love to have something great to share here, but I think it's perfect as it is. Well done!



CONCLUSION:
You have a great writing style and I enjoy reading your poems, blog posts and other writings. Well done!

Thank you for sharing your time, sense of story, and writing with the Writing.Com community!

May love, joy and peace be yours in abundance!
PWheeler








A Review from: "Positive Hearts Reviews Group" 





My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .