Hi aracrae ;

I'm 💙 Carly- Hello 2025 and I found your chapter when I clicked on the read and review link for the day. This is not usually the type of story I would read, but it seemed to pull me in despite feeling lost... starting at chapter 27 does not help.

I'm sure there is a lot of background that I am missing so I am less inclined to comment. The action is there. There is a build up that I think is rather well done. I feel for Kam.

But I am not sure about the various groups of people or how they fit together. Silo's group and Kam and Bel.


I did notice this:
"He needed a belt for his slacks this time, and the vest hangs off his shoulders in a way it didn’t before." I think hangs should be hung.
I was also not sure if Kam is dating only Bel, but also Silo.

I wish you well in this story. Keep at it.

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .