"Game of Thrones" Hello fellow writer. My name is Sandra. I am one of the sly foxes.Title: White Balloons First Impression: The sorrow, the grief is palpable in this poem. The title intrigued me. I have never observed any balloons much less white ones at a graveside service. Is this common for the funeral of a child? If it is I have learned something new here. Rain at a graveside commitment...why does this occur? It is not always a cliche. Does grief require somber weather to make it real? I like the questions that precede/introduce each stanza. An observer might ask. This serves to accentuate the narrator's musings and observations.What needs your attention: I cannot think of anything. There is nothing to edit or criticize. You present a sad gathering in a cemetery. No effusiveness needed.What part I liked best: I must admit I liked the spacing and the font choices. The elegant script lends a formality to this poetry. As I mentioned I like the questions. They are reflexive. Death always raises those in spades. There are not always answers either. No response is anticipated. They reveal the thought processes of the onlooker. The questions will float in the air like those balloons. Yes, the balloons could be a salute to the deceased child, a nod to their young age. Your description of them saluting the sky is vivid. Yes, again. Those in attendance may be described as "standing sentry". They are now left to wait and wonder why. Will words comforting or not "let them go"? The letting go of balloons and watching them soar away is symbolic. Overall Impression: This is a poignant slice of life portrayed in carefully chosen words. Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure. What does the fox say??? Listen carefully.(1857 characters) DISCLAIMER: The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.
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