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Hi Kristina

My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: Giovanni's Body

First Impression: Nicely woven story for the prompt 28 in the Game of Thrones. Giovanni's prompts appeal to me the most among all the offerings in the North Remembers. I hope you're enjoying the writing as much as me.
I'm so sorry about your husband Kristina. I remember when you used to blog anddiscussed your husband being in and out of the hosptial. I'm so glad you're back on WDC.

What needs your attention: I didn't notice any punctuation or grammar issues. Kudos.

What part I liked best: Old man Hawkins amused me when he remarked another parolee indicating there have been a few. His coming over to the table and asking if she saw him then explaining the little boy's background story. So sad.

c:borange}Overall impression: The author wove a tale about the first meal and inmate had after being released from prison. Those first interactions on the outside were nicely written. The comment between the guards about her being a nobody was great foreshadowing for the story ahead. I thought you did an excellent job placing us in the moment. The pacing was good and the characters felt believable.

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