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 My Future Children Open in new Window. [E]
A letter to my future kids about how I would love to be happy.
by jay Author Icon
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Rated: E | (3.0)
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As a mother of 9 minions wonderful blessings (yes, nine!), I am able to say that you have some great advice for your future younglings.

I would suggest adding that children should always stand fast and hold on to the Truth, even if it goes against the flow or makes people angry.

Couple of things that might help with the layout of this letter:

You pasted it twice, so it's repeating itself. That's an easy edit and fix, though.

When you say, "...never let anyone tell you how valuable you are..." do you mean "don't let anyone tell you that you aren't valuable"? Because, obviously, our children (even future children!) are extremely valuable.

Looks like a good work in progress. I can see it still needs an ending of some kind to tie it altogether.

Beautiful words. Praying you will get that chance to be a mom someday. Sounds like you'll be a good one. *Smile*
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