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The Iron Bank of Braavos  (13+) For G.o.T. Activity #1994693 by Gaby

A Review From The Iron Bank Of Braavos

Title: The War Next Door

First Impression: Feuding neighbors. I lived with neighbors being a pain. I didn't do well with neighbors. I live in the country now with no neighbors. Now, to your story. The neighbor sounded like a grouch but he did kill her roses. She wasn't Susie Sunshine either I thought I would read more. I am here with a review and my observations.

What needs your attention: Maybe the man should have lived for spite since the old lady was so mean when she shot him. He should have called 911 to go check on her.

What part I liked best: The man cared enough to check on his mean neighbor. The old lady blaming everything on the man next door. Setting him up. Really. This story makes the reader want to see shat would happen next. The blood on her carpet would hard to clean. That made the man happy as he laid there bleeding.

Overall Impression: Well rounded characters. Suitable dialogue. A good storyline, Looks like you spent time with this. I see prompt words were highlighted. Looks like these words played out well in this story. Creative and impressive.
i enjoyed reading this. A shocking ending.

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