Bubba's Corner BBQ [E] Trying to give a tourist directions to Bubba's |
Greetings from the House of Mormont! By participating in a Writing.com activity called "Game of Thrones" , I am in no way endorsing the GoT franchise or identifying as a fan thereof. I’m here to help my team win Hi! I was looking for something rated E in the Comedy genre, and your newly minted tale is right on top. I saw the post by Sophy announcing today’s requirements and couldn’t resist seeing how you did. When the hog made its way into the smoker, I figured that would be the end of the poor fella… I’m glad your comedic saga turned out well for the hog. It’s a quick, rollicking tale that suits the prompt well. A couple of typos: ~ “of the park. Park your car” the sentences should be joined by a comma. ~ “must of” I’m uncertain of the tone you’re using here; if it’s a hillbilly speaking, it makes sense, but would they really call Bubba’s a tan brick “establishment?” I’m not feeling a strong Southern accent in the native’s speech, and this grammatical slip up is a little jarring. It could just as easily be an English villager speaking, but the idea of Bubba’s BBQ is distinctly Southern US, and perhaps you missed an opportunity to cultivate a stronger regional atmosphere. Anyway, enough of that. It was a fun story, brief and to the point. Thanks for sharing, take care and keep writing The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise. "The WDC Angel Army" My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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