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 |  | Night of the Fireflies  [13+] Andrea captures something more than she bargained for  |
 This is a "Game of Thrones" review!Hello, !  Overall Impression:This is such a charming and whimsical story, and it captures all the essence of a child's wonder. Title and Description: Both the title and description are wonderful, and I absolutely love the image you've used. Is this prompt from "Game of Thrones" ? Because if it is, I have no idea how you found the time to get an image on it, let alone such a fitting one! I can barely get punctuation into my Game of Thrones stories!Hook and plot:The narrative is perfect for a children's story, with a lighthearted mystery leading the way. The initial setup with the fireflies is a great hook and transitions seamlessly into the fantasy side of things when they reveal themselves. The plot is even and paced well, and the mystery component meshes with the pacing, making it an easy story for young ones to follow. The promise of fairies is a perfect topic for getting young readers engaged. With the promise of seeing the fairies again, there's a soft clinghanger, but the story itself is perfectly resolved and very satisfying. Characters and dialogue:Andrea is immediately likable. Her interactions with the fairies are cautious and tender, and the dialogue between them provides important information without boring the reader. For such a short story, there is plenty of depth to both Andrea and the fairies' magical nature. Grammar and Mechanics:The story is vivid and immersive, with no errors that stand out. Final Thoughts:The story is a beautiful, magical encounter that encourages empathy and respect for all creatures. By capturing childhood innocence (and essentially bottling it!), you've created a great addition to the children's genre. Thank you for sharing your work with us! Jayne   My approach to reviews: "I'll Explain, but not Disclaim" The views and opinions in this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and, therefore, do not necessarily reflect the group, activity, and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.
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You responded to this review 04/12/2024 @ 4:23am EDT