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O Mohonk Open in new Window. [E]
A visit to a wonderful place that left me breathless!
by Ẃeβ࿚ẂỉԎḈĥmas Author Icon
Review of O Mohonk  Open in new Window.
Review by Jayngle Bells Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello, Ẃeβ࿚ẂỉԎḈĥmas!

*Checkb*Overall Impression:
I love the use of alliteration in this poem.

*Checkb*Form, Rhythm, Cadence, and Style:
There is a natural ebb and flow to this poem that takes the reader on a slow, meandering walk through Mohonk. There's plenty of sensory detail and alliteration to provide vivid imagery and emotional depth.

*Checkb*Content:
Mohonk sounds breathtaking and peaceful. Highlight the natural beauty and tranquility, along with the scents of lilac, cherry blossoms, moonlit nights, and breathtaking views, are a sensory bonanza. With such intense sensory detail, the reader can't help but have an emotional attachment to a place they've never been. Or, if they had been there, they would undoubtedly have had some nostalgia kick in.

*Checkb*Grammar and Mechanics:
I found no problems with spelling or grammar.

Your use of alliteration in this poem is top-notch, providing a sing-song pull into the picturesque painting (see what I did there?). In all seriousness, your use of the poetic device is wonderful. Some of the lines that really hit me were:

Breathtaking views be-feast the eyes - This line could have easily become bogged down in excessive language, but be-feast the eyes complete an entire image all on its own.

Small creatures scatter, to secure stations for the night - So much alliteration in this one, yet it slips by barely noticed because it reads so well. It feels secretive, indicates a quiet business beneath the calm, and may reflect your connection with nature, a common theme in your poems.

*Checkb*Final Thoughts:
With its feeling of peace, the place and the poem provide a sanctuary from the business of daily life. It was lovely to read.

Thank you for sharing your work with us!

Jayngle Bells Author Icon*Smile*


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