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 NURSERY RHYMES Open in new Window. [13+]
A detective cracks a case thanks to a parrot
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Review by StephBee Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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This is a review for "NURSERY RHYMESOpen in new Window. from House Targaryen for "Game of ThronesOpen in new Window.

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*Reading* THE STORY

There are two seemingly unrelated murders, but are they? The obvious isn't so obvious and believe it or not, a parrot holds the clue!

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

I loved the methodical detective work done by Danny. Everything he did was logical and in a precise order.

*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the third person limited by Danny. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.

*Star* DIALOGUE

There's a good blend of dialogue and narration. The dialogue accents the narration well.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

There's enough to set the scenes. I liked: "Comfortable in his blue jeans, and St. Lawrence Isles Police t-shirt, he leaned back in his chair and silently reviewed his notes again." The author uses a good economy of words to describe our detective.

*Star* SETTING

TIME: modern day
PLACE: at a local resort

This is something that is clarified for the reader.

*Star* CHARACTERS

Danny

Danny is determined and that's what I like about him. *Thumbsup*

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The title fits the story well. The opening was a quick description of our detective and then it gets into the crime. It hooks you quick and keeps you reading!

Reviewed by StephB for House Targaryen

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