The Town Watcher [E] Millicent has the time and the inclination to keep an eye on things. |
GAMES OF THRONES STORY REVIEW In conjunction with: This is a review for "The Town Watcher" from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones" The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise. THE STORY Millicent is a tad older, not much to do, so she heads to the stone bench to watch the busy town around her. WHAT I LIKED I liked the characterization. Millicent is quite a character with her own quirky ways, but aren't we all a little quirky? POV NARRATION/TENSE This is told in the third person omniscient. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately. DESCRIPTIONS There's enough to set the scenes. I liked: "Millicent unpacked her cavernous tote bag, the one with all the handy pockets." The author uses a good economy of words to paint a great visual in my imagination. I pictured an older lady, a little bored, with a tote bag so big you could put just about anything in it. SETTING TIME: modern day PLACE: local town This is something that that is clarified for the reader. I pictured a mid size town where everybody just about knows everybody. It makes the story more personal. CHARACTERS Millicent She's a people watcher. Nothing wrong with that, but sometimes you might see stuff you don't want to see. MECHANICS I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS The title fits the story. The opening had me hooked with it's comedic beat. Nice conversational character voice. This is a story that will make the reader smile at the end. HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews" Reviewed by StephB for House Targaryen }
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