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Game of Thrones - House Lannister Open in new Window. [18+]
A place where I fight to survive
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         Review for entry/chapter: "Dream Portals To Other Realms" Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Storyline: Jenna has powerful dreams, as she struggles through regular life. One night of dreams leads her to a land of small fairies in the most beautiful land she's ever seen. Learning that her dreams lead her to other realms and dimensions, Jenna is excited and cannot wait for night to come back so she can explore more.

Spelling/Grammar Issues: *Thumbsupl*

Description/emotion: Fantastic descriptions. The first of Jenna all tangled in her bedsheets, then onto the plush green and vibrant flowers. The little fairies fluttering all about painted a wonder picture of this realm. In her second dream, Jenna knows instinctively that she is now in a more evil place. No sounds, no pretty lights, no beauty. She is quickly captured and taken underground. Dank walls, dripping walls leading to a prison, and bars so big they were made for Giants, not humans, but the giant standing guard, makes it impossible for Jenna to escape.

Overall Impression: Fantastic job with this prompt. You have a wonderful eye that puts brilliant images in one's mind as they delve deeper into your story. I was immediately hooked at that mention of alternate realms, and parallel universes. This could become a much larger story if you are inclined to take it on. A Novel perhaps?




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