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 | Girl's Write Out  [13+] Dealing with a muse  |
| (4.5)| GAMES OF THRONES STORY REVIEW This is a review for "Girl's Write Out" from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones"   The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.  THE STORYLena needs her muse to focus on poetry and not gussing her up.  WHAT I LIKEDI enjoyed the character voice. Chloe came across a flighty must with determination to do the right thing by her writer and Lena came across as a determined writer wanting to find balance with Chloe.  POV NARRATION/TENSEThis is told in the first person by Lena. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately. DIALOGUEThere's a good blend of dialogue and narration. Dialogue tags are used appropriately. DESCRIPTIONSThere's enough to set the scenes. I liked: "dress in something that actually flatters you, and discover a hairstyle. Geez, Lena!" We get a great visual of Lena using a good economy of words. SETTINGTIME: modern day? PLACE: not sure? A Writer's house? This is something that isn't necessarily clarified for the reader, but I don't think it needs to be. The piece is a vinyette is more focused on comedic bets. CHARACTERSLena She's a writer, but she needs her muse to play along.  MECHANICSI did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of spacing here on WDC to make it easier on the reader's eyes. The vinyette is easy to read. PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONSI liked the title a lot and I thought it captured the essence of the quirkiness between Chloe and Lena. The opening engages the reader in a nice conversational tone. A comedic read that make one think on a slightly deeper level.   HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM"Anniversary Reviews"  Reviewed by StephB for House Targaryen  }
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You responded to this review 04/14/2024 @ 8:53pm EDT