Hi Detective! Oh, I loved your poem about Shoes! I was attracted to it because...Well, SHOES!! As a person who could spend hours 'playing' in a shoe store, I knew I would enjoy yours, and I did!

What a fun poem! I think if you want to get someone's attention, you talk about puppies or shoes! I felt that your title of, The Shoe Emporium, was very clever. Whenever I hear of a store called a boutique or emporium, it always makes me think it's a very special type of store, selling exquisite merchandise. That right there already set the stage for what's to come in your poem.

Did you ever consider adding a stock image to the brief introduction? I just took a quick little look, and I see lots of selections that would work nicely here. This one, for example: C102336, was listed under the 'shoes' category. It shows someone resting with their feet up. The age is unknown and the shoe type could really be anything. There are also other places in the stock images you might look under for 'boots', 'shoes', and accessories.

I liked that you used creativity in making many stanzas of various types of shoes. In those stanzas, I felt gentle humor, and (since you meant this to be in the children's genre), I could imagine little ones running around in their fancy purple sequined cowgirl boots. My daughters certainly had cowgirl boots, though those were pink!

You covered everything, though I didn't see any rain boots there. The idea for an additional stanza?

I liked that you added sports cleats, walking shoes, and business shoes as well. It's the type of words which make your readers envision your Shoe Emporium well. Speaking of which, it was nice that you returned to that wording at the end for good closure, too.

Oh, and I would also like to point out that your rhymes were clever as well. You chose unusual words to rhyme, in my opinion, which I felt added to the uniqueness of the, 'store'. Nice work!

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