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The Iron Bank of Braavos  (13+) For G.o.T. Activity #1994693 by Gaby

"Game of Thrones"  Hello fellow writer! My name is Sandra. I am one of the sly foxes. Title: Whisker's Tale First Impression: This reads well and has an engaging quality to it. The active voice of the self-professed confidante cat is appealing. Of course, he/she notices everything and is quite involved in the mistress' life. A viewpoint from a feline is fun and direct. This cat speaks its mind and does not mince words or observations. Ella's happy ever after is guaranteed and facilitated by her beloved cat. Things that need your attention: I spotted one minor faux pas and I would consider it a keyboard slip/ glitch. The final sentence needs a period at its end. No spelling errors or grammatical issues. This is written as speech from the cat. What I liked best: This feline has an attitude, but ultimately it serves Ella well. There are dashes of light-hearted humour sprinkled throughout this piece. The cat is blase about house cleanliness and only deigns to hunt rodents as sport/amusement. It objects to being hampered with a bow to spruce up its appearance. "I'm a cat, not a decoration." "I may or may not have sharpened my claws on a tapestry or two."" Another part is miffed that my prey has been turned into unappetizing equines." "I may have to find new prey to hunt in the palace." With the action and descriptions I envision the illustrations for a children's book. Of course, this cat will be a stunner, very handsome and sleek. The happy ending will appeal to children and they would be delighted with the feline narrator. Overall Impression: This is a fun story as told by a feline privy to its mistress' life. According to the cat, it ensures a happy ending for Ella and itself. They will live a new, luxurious life free of the stepmonsters. Thank you for allowing me to read your work. it has been my pleasure! What does the fox say??? Listen carefully. (1971 characters)DISCLAIMER: The views and opinions in this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.