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 Worm Moon Open in new Window. [13+]
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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GAMES OF THRONES POEM REVIEW

This is a review for "Worm Moon" Open in new Window. from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones" Open in new Window.

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*Reading* THE STORY

When a red quartz relic is found, Miss Harris is on the hunt to find out where it came from and what it was used for.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

I liked the ending, because I was totally lost and the ending gave the vinyettes context.

*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the third person omniscient in 3 vinyettes that tie-in together. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.

*Star* DIALOGUE

There's a good blend of dialogue and narration. Dialogue tags are used appropriately.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

There's enough to set the scenes. I liked: "As you know, during a total lunar eclipse, the Earth moves between the sun and the moon and cuts off the moon's light supply, the sun. When this happens, the moon's surface takes on a reddish glow instead of going completely dark." - it's a very succient description of a lunar eclipse that's easy to understand and visualize in the reader's imagination.

*Star* SETTING

TIME: ancient times and modern day
PLACE: college setting and outdoors

This is something that is clarified for the reader.

*Star* CHARACTERS

Miss Harris is the main character

In that she does the research to offer a viable theory for the red quartz. *Thumbsup*

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling mistakes. I might suggest a minor edit for WDC tags.
Currently: 100,000 years font:verdana}older than the I would correct the tag.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

I think the title fits with the theme of the "moon" but I would clarify how worm fits in the story. The opening engages the reader. I enjoyed how the vinyettes came together in the end.

Reviewed by StephB for House Targaryen

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