Night of the Fireflies [13+] Andrea captures something more than she bargained for |
Hello iKïyå§ama! This review is given on behalf of "Game of Thrones" . Great job with the prompt! It looks like it was a fun write. It's a tale full of magic, mystery, suspense, and fantasy. I t was creative and imaginative. Nice job! The Title and Description - Excellent title. It compliments the story perfectly. Fabulous description that catches one's attention and urges them to read on! The Storyline/Plot - A little girl is camping, and comes up with a plan, to catch some fireflies. Her plan works nicely and she captures five in a jar. While looking at her fireflies, she falls asleep. She is awakened by a small voice, and is shocked when she finds out where the tiny voice is coming from! The Characters - We're able to get to know the little girl's heart and personality through your words. Well done. The Setting - Excellent job with the setting. We're able to envision each scene as we read. Whar I Liked Best - I love the little girl's thoughts when deciding whether to let them out of the jar or not. It's a legitimate concern. I also liked the visual of using the fireflies for the light in the dark tent. Thank you for sharing your writing with us. It's a cute story and would make a wonderful children's book! Tracey The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise. My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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