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 The Jump Open in new Window. [E]
A tale of a leap of faith....Writing prompt. Had to use the bold words
by Temperance Stone Author Icon
Review of The Jump  Open in new Window.
Review by JayNaNoOhNo Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello, Temperance Stone!

*Checkb*Overall Impression:
"The Jump" is an evocative narrative that captures the essence of confronting and overcoming one's deepest fears. It's a genuinely universal experience portrayed through a potent metaphor of a literal leap.

*Checkb*Title and Description:
The title encapsulates the central theme of "a leap of faith." The description "leap of faith" hints at the story's physical and symbolic dimensions, setting up an expectation of discovery.

*Checkb*Hook and plot:
The story opens in media res, with the protagonist poised on the brink of an intimidating challenge, hooking the reader with a sense of urgency. As the story progresses, it builds tension through a series of reflective and introspective moments, followed by the cathartic release as the protagonist finally makes the jump. The plot maintains a great pace, ensuring that the reader is emotionally invested throughout.

*Checkb*Characters and dialogue:
The protagonists are presented with a depth of vulnerability and resilience, making them relatable and inspiring. The dialogue, focused on encouragement and internal monologues, effectively reveals the protagonists' fluctuating emotions and, ultimately, their courage.

*Checkb*Grammar and Mechanics:
Using the first-person narrative enhances the immediacy and intimacy of the experience. You don't need the explanation at the end; the story gets the message across without it.

*Checkb*Final Thoughts:
The story beautifully parallels significant life experiences and highlights the universality of fear of the unknown and the exhilaration of overcoming it. Its philosophical depth makes it a memorable and inspiring read. It encourages all readers to embrace the beauty that awaits on the other side of fear.

Thank you for sharing your work with us!

JayNaNoOhNo Author Icon*Smile*



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