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Game of Thrones Open in new Window. [18+]
House of Mormont
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Storyline: Abby has just been released from prison and is ready to make a fresh start. She looks forward to the waitressing job in Bear Valley. It's winter, snowing and the parking lot holds only the bus waiting to take her to her destination. The journey takes her to a Roadhouse. She realizes how hungry she is, and can't wait to get inside. Once seated and spooning her soup, she sees a little boy with a purple backpack outside, no coat, freezing the wintery weather.

Spelling/Grammar Issues: *Thumbsupl*

Description/emotion: How you described the stench from the bus had me turning up my nose. Good job! You did well showing us what Tommy Lee looked like, too. Abby seems to have a good heart, giving up one of her possessions, especially one she needs, to help the little boy.

Overall Impression: Old Man Hawkins knows exactly what is happening, and even though he tells Abby Tommy Lee's story, she has a hard time believing it, which is understandable. Once she reaches the bus to board for the rest of the journey, she turns to see Tommy Lee with another parolee, and his little voice repeating the same words he'd said to her. That was confirmation that he's a ghost and wrapped up the story well.




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