Car crash [E] Pushing me to try write just to see what happens. poem a day contest. Not qualification? |
Hello, Vpbanjo! This health poem of yours was featured in my "read & review" section and I enjoyed it so I decided to give you a review. I hope you benefit from this review and find it encouraging and uplifting. I also hope you enjoy your time on this site. It is a wonderful community of writers and I'm glad you're a part of it. INITIAL IMPRESSION / OVERVIEW: I thought your health-related poem was heartfelt and hoped it wasn't true... but suspected it was. You kept me riveted and I read straight through to the end. MORE DETAILED FEEDBACK: Whether it's true or not, that's a terrible thing to happen. And with people texting and driving so much nowadays... I imagine that kind of thing is happening more and more. It's truly heartbreaking. By MS, I'm guessing you meant multiple sclerosis. That's a terrible disease. I've read that there are some lifestyle things that can help (in addition to whatever you're doing by your doctor's orders). I think an Australian doctor wrote a book something like "Overcoming Multiple Sclerosis" and has a charity at www.overcomingms.org ... if this is a true story, or you know someone else with multiple sclerosis, that might be a good resource for you or them. I admire that you do the best you can do to write and help people. This would be admirable for anyone, and for someone with all of your health challenges, it's especially so. You have a beautiful heart for the Lord and His children (all people). I love that you reminded me that technology helps us to connect and be part of the world, no matter how far apart we are. Your poem was interesting to me, felt like it was coming straight from your heart and soul, and made me want to give you a big hug and pray for you. I can't give you a hug in person, so here's a virtual one: . I will pray for you right now before continuing this review. IDEAS TO MAKE YOUR PIECE STRONGER: I would love to have something great to share here, but I think it's nice as it is. Well done! CONCLUSION: You have a beautiful heart and I enjoy reading your poems, blog posts and other writings. Well done! Thank you for sharing your time, heart, spirit, and writing with the Writing.Com community! May love, joy and peace be yours in abundance! PWheeler Positive Hearts A Review from: "Positive Hearts Reviews Group" My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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