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Bogeyman Nights Open in new Window. [13+]
Hilarious happenings, while guarding a teen's domain.
by Ẃeβ࿚ẂỉԎḈĥmas Author Icon
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Review by Annette Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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First impression:

The title and the intro line together hint at a fair bit of chaos about to happen in the story and possibly to the reader. The words: hilarious, teen, and bogeyman put together should not disappoint.

What works:

The way the mystery unfolds and the funny addition to the story that the first person narrator was enjoying a vacation at the beach. The ending was very creepy. Was the sneakers wearer never found? That's a terrifying thought. I hope that seeing John, who must have dozed off on some nights, made it less fun to be the bogeyman to a first floor window. It would not be fun to try and get into the room of what is thought to be that of a young girl only to run into a testosterone monster with murder on his mind.

What needs work:

a few single-family homes sprinkled amongst them . *Right* delete that space in front of the period.

Final thoughts:

The story, written in first person narrative, reads as if it was a story from your own life. I try not to read stories as if they truly happened to the writer because a lot of writing is fiction. But this one was put in the Family Stories folder, so this could have been you. I am glad that mom and the brothers were not playing around with safety. That first night of standing guard and ending up with the two brothers beating on each other was almost expected.

Whether dramatized or entirely truthful to the last little detail, this story does make me wonder what is wrong with people who would go and stalk out others in their homes. Especially early teen girls.

Annette
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