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Review #4747234
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Quilting the Poems Open in new Window. [18+]
A journal to keep track of my poetic thoughts.
by LostGhost: Seeking & Learning Author Icon
         Review for entry/chapter: "Hear the silence!" Open in new Window.
Review by JayNaNoOhNo Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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Hello, LostGhost: Seeking & Learning !

*Checkb*Overall Impression:
Right from the start, this poem grabs attention with its introspective tug-of-war between the power of words and the depth of silence.

*Checkb*Form, Rhythm, Cadence, and Style:
Opting for free verse was a great choice. The form effectively captures a fluid, conversational tone that suits its introspective theme. The staggered indentation not only adds a visual element but also emphasizes the pauses and silences that are central to the poem's message. This structure works well to slow the reader down, making them reflect on each line.

*Checkb*Content:

Your poem crafts a compelling narrative around the eloquence of silence, urging the reader to consider how much can be communicated without words. Its emotional intensity and subtle complexity offer a rich experience that only gets better with multiple readings.

Where it really excels is in its exploration of silence as a form of communication. By juxtaposing spoken words with silence, it highlights how unspoken emotions can be as loud, if not louder, than verbal expressions. The plea to "read those deleted sentences" is a striking call for deeper empathy and understanding, adding a layer of urgency and intimacy to the poem.

*Checkb*Grammar and Mechanics:
The poem's minimalist approach to punctuation mirrors its thematic focus on what is absent. I'm not always a fan of minimal punctuation, but it works well with the theme in this case. The formatting isn't distracting, and I believe it enhances the readability.

*Checkb*Final Thoughts:
This speaks volumes about the unspoken, making it a sharp commentary on human connections and the importance of non-verbal interactions. It challenges the reader to listen more attentively to the silences in their own lives.

Thank you for sharing your work with us!

JayNaNoOhNo Author Icon*Smile*


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