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 | Tinkering Dreams  [ASR] Harold had never been lucky. Orphaned and fired. Still had dreams though.  |
| (5.0)| Greetings from the House of Mormont! By participating in a Writing.com activity called "Game of Thrones" , I am in no way endorsing the GoT franchise or identifying as a fan thereof. I’m here to help my team win  Hi, I’m here to do a couple of Anniversary Reviews to help me finish off Door 20 in GoT. There’s some dispute about whether it needs ten reviews or twenty, and as there’s a limit to how much stink I can raise without being booted out entirely, I wanted to be on the safe side before it’s too late  I had no idea the Doors would be closing at midnight tomorrow… Gaby sprung that on us…Anyway, a fantastic story you have here, full of atmosphere and feeling. We can see everything playing out before us, and it’s “shown not told” quite well. The steampunk elements are carefully woven into the late Victorian era setting, and the dialogue is accurate to a Dickensian extent. I love how Harold has a happy ending, but I do hope he tried to help that poor girl before they parted ways. It was quite distressing to see the abject poverty and desperation she was living in, and the horrors of the sweatshop that Harold was working in are well portrayed. Was this your own idea, unprompted by any contest? It isn’t often I come across a good steampunk story that wasn’t written to a contest, and the idea of the enormous hat full of gadgets reminded me of last month’s Steampunk contest by Beck. Or was that this month’s…? No, March was the most recent one. Anyway, this was a great read, and I don’t have much to suggest. Thanks for sharing, take care and keep writing  . The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.  "The WDC Angel Army"  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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