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 All's Fair in Sales and Marketing Open in new Window. [ASR]
A 300-word short story featuring the words: name, wheel, box. Daily Flash Fiction entry.
by Jeff Author Icon
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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A "Game of Thrones"  Open in new Window. by Creeper Of The Realm Author Icon Review


Storyline: Flash fiction about two people sitting beside one another at a work conference, listening to the motivational speaker. Sam and Carl strike up a conversation, and he gives her some advice about surviving her new environment.

Spelling/Grammar Issues: None.

Description/emotion: I enjoyed the interaction between Carl and Sam and the added elements of humor you managed to get into this piece. I like female characters who aren't afraid to speak up, and Sam asking for some advice about her new job showed strength. Carl's three pieces of advice were great, especially repeating the words from the opening of the story for added humor, giving Sam some insight into Carl's personality. Comparing inauthenticity to a stinking perfume I have to say had me turning my nose up as I continued reading.

Overall Impression: You got the prompt words into the story smoothly. That's not always an easy task. I liked that Carl mentioned that there were free drinks when it was over and then followed that up a minute later, offering to buy Sam a drink. He definitely showed off his marketing skills with that one. Their interaction was smooth and felt real. Great job with this three-hundred-word story!




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