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 A Man's Hands Open in new Window. [E]
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by MoonChilde Author Icon
Review of A Man's Hands  Open in new Window.
Review by Choconut Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi MoonChilde Author Icon,

Thank you for entering your poem into "Fox's Socks Newbie Poetry Contest" Open in new Window.. I am Choconut, one of the contest judges for the October round.

I am reviewing your poem, "A Man's Hands" Open in new Window., in affiliation with "The WDC Angel Army" Open in new Window..

Please remember these views are purely my own and any advice given is with the sole intention of being helpful.

First Impressions: As I first read this, I was impressed with your use of imager. I really liked the theme of hard vs. soft, rough vs, gentle that runs through the poem. It is an interesting topic, and I can honestly say I haven't read a poem like it before.

Voice/Tone: You explore masculinity, and the expectation placed on men, by writing about their hands. Your narrative voice works really well. I love this conflict between the tough protector that men feel they should be and the tender, loving people they often feel that they are.

Mechanics: The rhythm in this poem is fantastic. I love free verse poetry, and this is a great example of that. It flows really nicely.

My Favourite Part: The imagery. You show so much in your descriptions of hands. I love the part where you say men's hands are rough, then switch to, " ...gentle enough ... Soft enough to wipe her tears." That touched me. It is a very tender and soft image.

Suggestions: If I'm honest, I would have liked a little more depth in the imagery. It is good, don't get me wrong. I just feel like I could have been more moved if you put a little more emotion into it. But that is a minor suggestion.

Thanks for sharing your poem. I enjoyed reading it.

Most importantly, keep writing!

Choconut

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