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 |  | Her First Time  [E] Don't jump to conclusions.  |
| (5.0)   HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"   Greetings, Zeke! I am reviewing this because today is your 17th WDC Anniversary and I appreciate all the reviews you've sent me in the past!  First of all, my reviews are intended to be helpful and encouraging, not hurtful in any way. Use what you feel works for you, and leave the rest. The Positives/What I Liked Of course the title drew me in right away: Her First Time. It gives the reader a sense of what it could be, but it's probably not.  Plus your Intro Summary--Don't jump to conclusions--makes one curious. Haha! The ending was a nice surprise, Zeke.  And somewhat of a relief! Whew.  I can certainly connect with the anxiety of going to the dentist. I never feared the shots though. It's having to keep my mouth open and keep myself from swallowing my spit while having a cavity filled (or whatever other procedure being done) that gives me panic.   You've done a great job with this little story, Zeke. It flowed nicely, had a good amount of dialogue, and kept this reader reading. On top of all that, it made me smile. Though now I'm thinking I should probably cut back on eating ice cream.   (Dark chocolate Dove-Minis are my favorite!) Suggestions/Comments to ConsiderI did not notice any typos, gramma issues, or incorrect punctuation. I have no suggestions. Nicely done! Final ThoughtsBy any chance, were you ever a dentist? (I had to ask!) I don't dislike dentists, but I HATE going to the dentist. You've done a great job with this piece, evoking both laughter AND anxiety in me. And perhaps this is a good reminder that I really should make a dentist appointment before I need a tooth pulled. Thanks for this enjoyable piece, Zeke. And once again, Happy 17th WDC Account Anniversary!  Have a great day and... K e e p on W r i t i n g ! Cubby ")
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