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 | Admiral Robert Wennington  [13+] Pirate or maritime hero? The underestimated admiral who seized the salt fleet of the Hansa  |
| (4.5)| Hi LightinMind , I am reviewing your short story, "Admiral Robert Wennington" , as one of the judges for March's official contest, "What a Character! : Official WDC Contest" . Thanks for entering, and good luck!This review is in affiliation with "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group" . Please remember any views are purely my own, and any advice is given with the sole intention of being helpful.What I liked: The story and the history. I was gripped.  As I was reading this, I kept thinking I must ask you whether it is based on facts, or not. But you answered that for me at the end by supplying the background information. The story is really interesting. I felt rather sorry for Suffolk. He seems like the only person who understands how important diplomacy is. Or, maybe, he is simply sore because Wennington, his subordinate, is blazing brightly for winning the Battle of Guernsey. That's possible. I liked your description of the persons in the Royal Court. The king seems arrogant and bloodthirsty. I love how proud he is of his beautiful wife. The dislike for Richard of York at the beginning is great. The King has open hostility towards the Duke's words, dismisses him, and the Queen bristles. What a great way to show how dislikable he was. In terms of characters, the descriptions you give of Wennington are all great. From his clothes, to his pride in his victory.Suggestions: I have a few grammar suggestions which I have put in a dropnote so you can read them as you wish, or not. Grammar Suggestions ▼ Parting comments: I love reading and studying history, so this was always going to appeal to me. But, the added interest, for me, lay in Henry VI being a part of the story because when I researched my family history, I traced my family all the way back to Henry VI and beyond. So anything with him in it interests me. That aside, this is a very enjoyable, well-written story. Thanks for sharing. Choconut
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