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Paint My Heart   [E]
Love of all the seasons
by CathrinStuart
Review of Paint My Heart  
Review by SeptemberBee
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE POEM

Love as seen through the colors of the seasons.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

I liked the word play; it deepened the expression of the poem. I especially liked how the beginning of the line of each stanza started with "Paint my Heart with" and changed with the seasons. Nice repetition.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is free form poem. There was no set rthyming patterns.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "Paint my heart with all the seasons, all the colors of a kaleidoscope." It's a vivid description which suggests a rich display of love.


*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

I really enjoyed how the first line repeated itself and just changed the season. The poem evokes a sensual experience by taping into the uniqueness of each season. The opening pulls the reader in and keeps them reading. The title fits the poem well. Well done! Nice expression.



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