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A Ring of Flowers  [13+]
Forever is not long enough. 26 lines. Writer's Cramp entry for 4/28/24
by IE
Review of A Ring of Flowers  
Review by SeptemberBee
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE POEM

This is a poem about the symbolic nature of the flowers when used in a circle.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

I liked how each stanza started with "A ring of flowers," and then went on to describe a different of that part of life, or the circle, if you would. It's a nice progression of the circle of the life.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is free form poem. There is no set rythme scheme.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read and has a nice flow when read out loud. Good use of WDC ML to increase the font and make it easy on the eyes.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "a lei, a welcome waxy plumeria for endurance, vibrant orchids an ode to your beauty," -- For me, a saw a woman in the prime of her life, enjoying the fruits of maturity and being appreciated for it. Nice expression using succinct word play.


*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening engages the reader, drawing them effortlessly into the poem and keeps them reading. The title fits the poem well. Nice expression.


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