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 | The Forever Wife  [ASR] Corentine was immortal. Her loves were not. (A Weird Tales Contest entry)  |
| (4.5)  HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"   First Impressions: That was a very interesting story. It’s an old question, what if an immortal falls in love with someone who is not? In this tale, the goddess seemed to be a caring one as she looked after each of her husbands over time, even when they were ageing and needed care. She also made sure that the memory of each one was kept alive by telling their tales. I was curious if they knew, at the beginning, who she was, or if that became clear to them over time as they aged and she didn’t. It doesn’t matter to the story, it just occurred to me that they might have found it a little strange how fondly she spoke of her ex-husbands, and how many there were, and how long ago some of their stories seem to have taken place. Perhaps they thought at first that she was simply a talented storyteller, and because of the special way she told them, she was interesting to listen to and they didn’t mind. Or maybe, it was how she opened the conversation on their first date. Honesty might be the best policy in this case!  Suggestions: The story was very well written and the language fit the tale perfectly. At first, I thought there were a couple of typos - wonderous and amoung - but as you used that spelling twice, I realised the you used the outdated spelling of those words on purpose which, on reflection, worked well in this story. I do, however, believe that there is a small issue in the dialogue. For example, in this line: "Yes my sweet?" She asked As the sentence continues with the dialogue tag, I think it should be “she” with a lowercase letter. Or in this line, "Of course." She replied Again, this is one sentence so the period should be a comma and “she” should begin with a lowercase letter. Having said that, you do this consistently in this story so I’m not sure if that is a choice or a rule I’m not aware of, but in case it was not intended, I thought I’d mention it.  Final Thoughts: I like tales about gods and goddesses, and this one was no exception. It’s interesting to imagine them interacting in this way with people, and particularly when their character or personality comes across so well, as it did in this tale. The story within a story was intriguing and worked well to tell the readers more about her and her history. Overall, I thought this was a good read! ** Image ID #2153781 Unavailable **  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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