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 | Smoke and Fairy Dust  [E] A midnight journey  |
| (5.0)   Greetings, MoonChilde! I am reviewing this because I discovoered it on Read & Review.  First of all, my reviews are intended to be helpful and encouraging, not hurtful in any way. Use what you feel works for you, and leave the rest. The Positives/What I Liked I have to say, I appreciate your font size and line spacing. Thank you for that, as it makes for easier reading and reviewing.  I also really like your title Smoke and Fairy Dust. It flows nicely and piques interest. I like that you didn't use punctuation in this poem. It gives the reader a sense of freedom that flows with your theme. My favorites are She drifts above the trees and No shadow does she cast. Nice imagery. Suggestions/Comments to ConsiderI didn't find any obvious typos. Your spelling and grammar were great. You might consider playing around with this, like uncapping your beginning lines, though it's not necessary. Also (just a passing thought) you might consider omitting She is in your last line, so it reads simply smoke and fairy dust. Final ThoughtsThis is a beautiful piece. Thanks for sharing. And also, Welcome to the community!!! If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to ask!Have a great day and... K e e p on W r i t i n g ! Cubby ")
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