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I'm a Benevolent Ruler Open in new Window. [18+]
I'm the ruler of the world, this is how it will be...
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Greetings and Happy Account Anniversary!

Well, I’m not quite sure how I stumbled across this item in your port…

Your declarations of what you’ll do as the ruler of the world are by turns amusing and satisfying. I chuckle at the indications of ego and pettiness, yet I have to admit that overall, your plans to improve the world’s conditions by hook or by crook are admirable and well intentioned. The proposals here, though exaggerated, contain many truths about life and the way we feel things should be instinctively. I love the emphasis on remaining married, the absolute refusal to accept lies and dishonesty, and the lofty goals to clean up the planet by reducing, reusing and recycling. And your honesty in admitting you have no clue how you would accomplish most of these things is good. We can work together on a plan…

You forgot to mention the giant corporations which control many aspects of society these days, including pollution and social media, communications and manufacturing. Monopolies would have to be broken up, bargains would have to be struck to assign funds to everyone according to their needs and allow them to choose jobs according to their talents. Life is a big mess, and if you ever did rule the world you’d have a huge task ahead of you.

I’m curious as to what prompted this lofty statement of just exactly 2000 words; was it a special contest? I see you have made no changes to it whatsoever since posting it, which is probably a personality issue with you rather than an assumption that it’s perfect as it is. I see a few minor typos, and I would definitely recommend using Size 4 Verdana font to ensure readability and accessibility across devices. But hey, at least you didn’t use Comic Sans, which defaults to the almost illegible proprietary Snell Roundhand on my iPad! Also, you need to use three relevant genres for the item so people can find it when browsing. I would recommend “Nonsense,” “Fantasy,” and “Political…”

Take care, thanks for sharing and keep writing *Smile* *HeartT*


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